Short Narrative - Concept Rework

I've been tumbling the idea around in my head for around 3 years now.
It's central theme combines blatant self-isolationism, disdain for modern societal demands and the fear of losing touch with one's own mind and the consequences of the complete rejection of reality.
The script has gone through several phases:
The first draft was a short 10 - 12 minute piece which focused on my contempt of modern conservative American viewpoints where science was concerned (Especially in the field of Astronomy). It was nothing special.
I liked it but I was never really happy with it.
It was dialogue heavy in the first few minutes before teetering off into the silent film genre. This is not necessarily a bad thing -- the major problem being that the dialogue itself, rather than the images being produced, were driving the narrative forward.
It was like a montage - In the first act the protagonist finds himself accosted by extra-terrestrials and then the second and third acts and finale were mostly a jumble of jump cuts. They were originally, I suppose, a means by which to illustrate to the audience the character's descent into madness and complete disillusionment with the world around him.
This was all well and good at the time, but it leaves much to be desired and I tossed it.
I came back to it a few months later with the intent of dragging out a simple storyline (Guy abducted by aliens; slowly looses sanity) into a 40 minute affair with the same basic premise -- only this time the script had begun to include superfluous characters and interactions that included clunky dialogue and unbelievable reactions by a character that I didn't even know apart from his first name.
Now I've come back to the story and I feel like the original version had the right idea.
A short piece with snippets from the deteriorating life of the main protagonist imbedded inside of a narrative structure that does not rely on cliches to drive the point home.

Not bad...

Last week I made a split second decision.
This was not a decision, as my first sentence would suggest, that required much thought.
It was a good decision and I feel proud for having made it.
Let me back up a bit.
My girlfriend is currently interning in Manhattan with Mr. Daniel Sieberg.
http://www.danielsieberg.com/
Yes, that Daniel Sieberg.
She's been doing production work for him for the past two weeks. (She wants to be a tech specialist for journalistic television venues -- she can do things with Avid that make Final Cut look like iMovie. No lie. I've seen it.)
It's a pretty big deal.
But she's not too familiar with public transportation in Manhattan.
Frankly, it's downright scary.

Half of those people are probably dead.




Regardless, she wanted me to accompany her into the city so that she could get used to the subway system / the LIRR.
The night before we left I printed off a few copies of my updated resume.
(AVAILABLE UPON REQUEST *wink* *wink*)
My plan was to walk into a bunch of different production houses in the city and hand deliver my fancy pieces of paper.
This plan went off without a hitch...
In so far that Universal Pictures was supposed to be at Columbus Circle and wasn't and I wasn't really allowed to go into the Paramount building.
No problem!
I stop at my locations, and even drop off a resume at Eastman Kodak right by Madison Square Garden.
The other stop that I made a point of making was at a place called PostWorks.
http://www.pwny.com/
Long story short, we came back home; She feeling good about meeting Daniel, and I feeling good about putting my name out there.
This, of course, was the Thursday before Memorial Day weekend.
I didn't hear from anyone, nor was I truly expecting it.
The girlfriend suggests I follow up the next Tuesday by calling back those production houses that actually gave me business cards.
One of them was for PostWorks.
Now I had worked with them before back when I was still going to Hofstra.
I made a full-color 16mm film and used PostWorks: The Lab to process the film.

So, I was familiar with them, and thought maybe I could do some work at the Lab.
What I had forgotten was that The Lab and PostWorks proper are two seperate facilities.
No worries. I dropped my resume with the post production house.
Worth a shot.
I left a message with Mr. Andy Rando. And thought nothing more of it.
Until Thursday Morning.
He called me back!
I am so excited, there is no guarantee for a job, but someone actually noticed my resume, and I couldn't be more thrilled. He invited me to come visit if I was in the neighborhood, and get a tour of the facility.
I plan on making my way there this coming Wednesday.
I will update once I know more!

Here's hoping it will at least get my foot in the door!

Cheers,
Matt